求英语老师帮我看看作文哪里有错误❓

求英语老师帮我看看作文哪里有错误❓
求英语老师帮我看看作文哪里有错误❓

求英语老师帮我看看作文哪里有错误❓
Everyone all(all去掉) have（has,everyone后面跟动词单数） favourite things,such as food,colours,sports and so on.Today I will tell you my favourite sport.My favourite sport is table tennis.It gets(get改成become,由于是过去式,所以改为became) my favourite sport when I was 6 years old.
Table tennis is very popular in China.Many people often play table tennis in the free time so that (加上they can,这里不可以省略主语)keep health.Table tennis is a exciting and relaxing sport.Learn(改为Learning,动词做主语得用ing形式) it is very easy and it is much safer than other sports.
Sometimes I play table tennis with my classmates in the school stadium.I want to play table tennis in the Olympic games one day.
I will be hard for my dream(这句话你是想说想实现我的梦想比较难,可以改为It will be hard for me to realise my dream) and(改为but更合适语境) I wish our dream（dreams） can come true.