In my point that,I think it is useful that we attend an enrichment class.Maybe we will less freedom,but we did improve our studies,we have more and more tests in the future,it is important that have an enrichment class.Once I attended an enrichment c

In my point that,I think it is useful that we attend an enrichment class.Maybe we will less freedom,but we did improve our studies,we have more and more tests in the future,it is important that have an enrichment class.Once I attended an enrichment c
In my point that,I think it is useful that we attend an enrichment class.Maybe we will less freedom,but we did improve our studies,we have more and more tests in the future,it is important that have an enrichment class.
Once I attended an enrichment class of maths in the summer vacation.From that time,I got up early and had to study all day.Tired as I was ,Inever felt it badly.Where there is a will,there is a way.It was a high mark that I got in the first test in school.
The enrichment class,which can improve your studies,is very useful,but we should have a rest,not crazy study.And I think the parents should give their children an enrichment class as their favour,but not give them much.

In my point that,I think it is useful that we attend an enrichment class.Maybe we will less freedom,but we did improve our studies,we have more and more tests in the future,it is important that have an enrichment class.Once I attended an enrichment c
In my point of view,i think it is useful that we attend an enrichment class.Maybe we will have less freedom,but we will improve our studies.If we have more and more tests in the future,then it is important to have enrichment classes.
Once I attended a maths enrichment class in the summer vacations.At that time,I got up early and had to study all day.Tired as I was ,I never felt bad.Where there is a will,there is a way.It was a high mark that I got in the first test back in school.
The enrichment class,which can improve your studies,are very useful.But we should have a rest,not study crazily.In addition I think the parents should give their children an enrichment class as they see fit,but not too many classes.

As far as I am concerned, it is useful for us to attend an enrichment class. Maybe we would have less freedom,but we would, in some degree, improve our studies. As long as we have more and more tests ...

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As far as I am concerned, it is useful for us to attend an enrichment class. Maybe we would have less freedom,but we would, in some degree, improve our studies. As long as we have more and more tests in the future,it is still important to have an enrichment class.
Once I attended an enrichment class of maths in the summer vacation.At that time,I got up early and had to study all day long.Tired as I was ,I never felt it badly. There is a famous saying that "Where there is a will,there is a way." As a result, I got a high mark in the first test at school.
Though the enrichment classes can improve our studies, which is at the same time proved very useful, however, we should have a rest but not be crazy about study.I think parents should give their children a chance to attend the enrichment classes in their favour,but not give them too much pressure.

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In my point that(In my point of view),I think(已经有前面就不需要I think了，要删去) it is useful that we attend an enrichment class(enrichment classes, 因为是we, 多种不同课程而不单是一个).Maybe we will (加have, 此处需要...

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In my point that(In my point of view),I think(已经有前面就不需要I think了，要删去) it is useful that we attend an enrichment class(enrichment classes, 因为是we, 多种不同课程而不单是一个).Maybe we will (加have, 此处需要动词) less freedom,but we did(现在时, did改成can, 能够) improve our studies,we have(are having, 表示将来) more and more tests in the future,it is important that have an enrichment class(we have enrichment classes).
Once I attended an enrichment class of maths in(during, 一段时间) the summer vacation.From(During) that time,I got up early and had to study all day.Tired as I was,Inever felt it badly.Where there is a will,there is a way.It was a high mark that I got in the first test in school.(I got a high mark in the first test in school 不一定要用从句的)
The enrichment classes,which can improve your(our) studies,is very useful,but we should have a rest,not crazy study.(用However, instead of study crazily, we should have a rest as well. 会不会通顺一点)And I think parents should give their children an enrichment class as their favour,but not give them much. (parents should give children their favorite enrichment classes, while minding their pressure at the same time. 我觉得这样比较容易理解)

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