帮忙看下有没有语法错误.一段话.Hello,every one!I am enjoy standing here giving a speach.I think I am very funny.I also like to have friends who are humorous.My favorite singer is Jay chou.He is great.I think he is very talented and creat

帮忙看下有没有语法错误.一段话.Hello,every one!I am enjoy standing here giving a speach.I think I am very funny.I also like to have friends who are humorous.My favorite singer is Jay chou.He is great.I think he is very talented and creat
帮忙看下有没有语法错误.一段话.
Hello,every one!I am enjoy standing here giving a speach.I think I am very funny.I also like to have friends who are humorous.
My favorite singer is Jay chou.He is great.I think he is very talented and creative.
I like to do sports.Because I am very active.I always play basketball at P.E.class.
Do you want to become my friends?If your answer is "Yes".Than I were very happy.
That is all.Thank you.

帮忙看下有没有语法错误.一段话.Hello,every one!I am enjoy standing here giving a speach.I think I am very funny.I also like to have friends who are humorous.My favorite singer is Jay chou.He is great.I think he is very talented and creat
I (am 去掉) enjoy standing here giveing a (speech).
I think I am very funny.( I think it would be fun to be my friends.我想和我做朋友会很有意思.)
I like to do sports.Because I am very active.( because 太强调因果关系,还是用 as 比较适合,两句话不用断开,改：I like to do sports as I'm very active.)
play basketball ( at 改 in ) P.E.class.
Do you want to become my friends?( 用词太生硬了,改 would you like to be my friends?would you like ...你愿意...是一种婉转征求别人意见的问句.)
If your answer is "Yes".Than I were very happy.( if 引导的条件从句不要跟主句用句号断开啊.than 是比较,then才是“那么、就”,但有了if 就不需要 then.改：If your answer is "Yes",that will be my honor.如果你的答案是“是”,那将是我的荣幸.)

I am enjoy standing---- am去掉
I also like to have friends who are humorous.-- I also like making friends with whom are humorous.
Do you want to become my friends?--- do u want to make friends with me ?
Than I were very happy--- then I will be very happy
FYI

I enjoy standing here to give a speach
.I also like to make friends who are humorous.
in P.E class
If your answer is "Yes" I will be very happy.

个人观点：I think I am very funny.这里不要用funny.不好。有可笑的意思。
另外：I am enjoy 改为I am enjoying
If your answer is 改为If your answers are你前面Do you want to become my friends?是复数。
Than I were very happy.改为Then I will be very happy.

Than I were very happy
改为 Then I will be very happy