自己写了个英语自我介绍,望各位高手能帮我挑挑其中的语法毛病,Good afternoon,My name is Liubin.It’s my first year in University of Shanghai for Science and Technology as a graduate student.My undergraduate major is Industria

自己写了个英语自我介绍,望各位高手能帮我挑挑其中的语法毛病,Good afternoon,My name is Liubin.It’s my first year in University of Shanghai for Science and Technology as a graduate student.My undergraduate major is Industria
自己写了个英语自我介绍,望各位高手能帮我挑挑其中的语法毛病,
Good afternoon,My name is Liubin.It’s my first year in University of Shanghai for Science and Technology as a graduate student.My undergraduate major is Industrial Engineering.I studied Mechanical Manufacture and Automation,Machine Design and Human Factors Engineering during my college studies.And now,my major is Biomedical Engineering.My main research direction is ergonomic design of handles of medical appliance.At present,most medical appliance in minimally invasive surgery are imported,and the hands of westerner are different from ours,so the handles are unsuitable to Chinese doctor.Furthermore,
Different types of handles will bring different results.For example,two different types of handles,a ring and an axial handle.It may be concluded that the latter one is more suitable than the former by ergonomic testing via virtual reality simulation.The medical appliance plays an important role in minimally invasive surgery.As is well known,a good medical appliance may not make an average people to be a good doctor,but it can make an average doctor to be an excellent doctor.In addition,I believe that the human-based design can make an excellent doctor to be wonderfully!

自己写了个英语自我介绍,望各位高手能帮我挑挑其中的语法毛病,Good afternoon,My name is Liubin.It’s my first year in University of Shanghai for Science and Technology as a graduate student.My undergraduate major is Industria
除了最后一句,没有语法错误,只是母语痕迹重了点.
至于最后一句,是这个意思 I believe the humanistic design will satisfy every excellent doctor?还是 I believe every excellent doctor will get better equipped with our humanistic design.

你已经是高手啦！