请英文高手查看文法语句是否有错误,给予纠正,What do you think is the most precious in the world?Money?Honor?Above all these,the most valuable is human heart,I think.To heal the hard closed heart and obtain it,it is the most valuable

请英文高手查看文法语句是否有错误,给予纠正,What do you think is the most precious in the world?Money?Honor?Above all these,the most valuable is human heart,I think.To heal the hard closed heart and obtain it,it is the most valuable
请英文高手查看文法语句是否有错误,给予纠正,
What do you think is the most precious in the world?Money?Honor?Above all these,the most valuable is human heart,I think.To heal the hard closed heart and obtain it,it is the most valuable thing.I want to be an art therapist who heals the broken heart and gives hope to them.
I had an uncle in my family.He suffered from alcoholism and lived a very miserable life.My family tried every means to cure him,but we could not cure his disease,which finally drove him to committing suicide.I felt much pity for him who chose death.Though he looks bright on the outside,he actually had a very serious wound in his heart.If the wound in his heart had been healed,he would be living an happy life now.Through his death I realized that we should express our feelings every time when we felt heart broken.
An art therapist is like a star transmitting light into heart.We have heard of the news that a sexual assault has been increasing.I want to run to the children to cure their heart who are going through the broken heart which cannot be expressed in words.I am helping those who are in need through voluntary service
I lived pretending to have no problems or to do right with my heart hidden.One day I told a teacher what I have in mind.After that,I felt relieved from my problems.We are living in the competition-oriented society without taking care of our mind.People usually draw a painting for their own happiness,but I want to draw a painting to heal the disease in human heart and to plant hope in its heart.Thank you for listening.

请英文高手查看文法语句是否有错误,给予纠正,What do you think is the most precious in the world?Money?Honor?Above all these,the most valuable is human heart,I think.To heal the hard closed heart and obtain it,it is the most valuable
What do you think is the most precious in the world?Money?Honor?Above all these,the most valuable thing(缺少主语,加上thing )is human heart,I think.To heal the hard closed heart and obtain it（it 应删去,使前后成句）is the most valuable thing.I want to be an art therapist who heals the broken heart and gives hope to them.
I had an uncle in my family.He suffered from alcoholism and lived a very miserable life.My family tried every means to cure him,but we failed（could not cure his disease删去,以避免重复）,（which finally drove,which引导这个定语从句有点牵强,删除）and he committed suicide in the end.I felt much pity for him who chose death.Though he looked（用过去时）bright in appearance（on the outside改为in appearance）,he actually had a very serious wound in his heart.If the wound in his heart had been healed,he would be living a happy life now.His death(Through his death改为His death)make me understand （realized改为understand）that we should express our feelings to others（every time删去）when we felt heart broken.
An art therapist is like a star transmitting light into heart.We have heard of the news that a sexual assault has been increasing.I want to run to the children to cure their hearts who are going through the broken heart which cannot be expressed in words.I am helping those who are in need through voluntary service
I lived pretending to have no problems or to do right with my heart hidden.One day I told a teacher what I had（have改为had） on my mind.（表示不开心的是在心里用on） （After that,改为then ）then I felt relieved from my problems.We are living in the competition-oriented society without taking care of our mind.People usually only care about （draw a painting for表达不规范,最好不用,改为care about）their own happiness,but I want to do something for the people in need（draw a painting to heal the disease in human heart and to plant hope in its heart删去）.Thank you for listening
修改后的全文如下：
What do you think is the most precious in the world?Money?Honor?Above all these,the most valuable thing is human heart,I think.To heal the hard closed heart and obtain it is the most valuable thing.I want to be an art therapist who heals the broken heart and gives hope to them.
I had an uncle in my family.He suffered from alcoholism and lived a very miserable life.My family tried every means to cure him,but we failed,and he committed suicide in the end.I felt much pity for him who chose death.Though he looke bright in appearance,he actually had a very serious wound in his heart.If the wound in his heart had been healed,he would be living a happy life now.His death make me understand that we should express our feelings to others when we felt heart broken.
An art therapist is like a star transmitting light into heart.We have heard of the news that a sexual assault has been increasing.I want to run to the children to cure their hearts who are going through the broken heart which cannot be expressed in words.I am helping those who are in need through voluntary service
I lived pretending to have no problems or to do right with my heart hidden.One day I told my teacher I had on my mind.Then I felt relieved from my problems.We are living in the competition-oriented society without taking care of our mind.People usually only care about their own happiness,but I really want to do something for the people in need.Thank you for listening

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我汗~~刚看了两句,发现第一第二句都有语法错误!!!你太牛了~~你还是再好好学好一点英语语法吧.我看不下去了 ...算了,既然都知道你第一第二句错了, 我就先帮你改正一下这两句吧.正确的是:In your opinion,what is the most precious in the world? Money? Honor? Above all of these,...

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我汗~~刚看了两句,发现第一第二句都有语法错误!!!你太牛了~~你还是再好好学好一点英语语法吧.我看不下去了 ...算了,既然都知道你第一第二句错了, 我就先帮你改正一下这两句吧.正确的是:In your opinion,what is the most precious in the world? Money? Honor? Above all of these,

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What is the most precious thing to you in the world? Is it money, or honor? To me, the most precious thing is the human heart. （不知道你to heal the hard heart is the most...是什么意思）。Noth...

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What is the most precious thing to you in the world? Is it money, or honor? To me, the most precious thing is the human heart. （不知道你to heal the hard heart is the most...是什么意思）。Nothing can give me greater joy than to heal a broken heart and give the patient renewed hope. This is why I want to be a therapist.
My uncle suffered from substance abuse, he is a very addicted alcoholic and lived a very miserable life. We tried every thing to bring him back, but we could not cure his addiction, which ultimately caused him to commit suicide. I felt much pity for him for choosing death. Though he looked very open and outgoing on the outside, on the inside, he was actually very depressed and wounded in his heart. If the wound in his heart had been healed, he would have been living a happy life. Through his death, I realized that we should express our feelings every time when we feel heart-broken.
A therapist (art therapist是什么职业啊？）is like a star shining light light into the heart. We have all heard of the news that the number of sexual assaults has been increasing, the victims are usually youths(强调关系，和后句联系）. I feel a great urge to cure the children's broken hearts, the pain of which is ineffable. Currently, I am helping those who are in need through volunteering (voluntary service过于啰嗦）.
I lived under the false pretense that I have no problems and kept my true feelings hidden from others. One day, I told a teacher what I had in mind. After that, I felt relieved from my problems. We are living in a competition-oriented society, and we often disregard the health of our mind. People usually paint paintings for their own happiness, but I want to paint a painting to heal the disease in other human hearts, and to plant hope in their hearts. Thank you for listening.

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我觉得你的这篇文章语序有点Chinglish。我改了很多，希望你能满意，也希望能帮助到你。呵呵
What do you think is the most precious in the world? Money ,honor or anything else? In my mind , the most valuable is human’s heart. It could be the...

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我觉得你的这篇文章语序有点Chinglish。我改了很多，希望你能满意，也希望能帮助到你。呵呵
What do you think is the most precious in the world? Money ,honor or anything else? In my mind , the most valuable is human’s heart. It could be the most meaningful thing to heal the indifferent and closed heart. So，I want to be an art therapist who can give hope to those broken hearts.
I had an uncle who once suffered from alcoholism and lived a very miserable life. We tried every means to cure his disease, but it doesn't even matter. Sadly, it finally drove him to commit suicide. I felt so pity for his death. Though he seemed bright in the outside, he actually had very serious pain in his heart. If the pain in his heart had been healed, he would be living an happy life now. Through his death I realized that we should abreact our sorrow and despair instead of enduring them alone.
An art therapist can light up the lamp of the broken hearts. We have heard the news that the sexual assault is increasing in teenagers. I desire to cure their hearts which are going to broke by voluntary service.
Actually, I used to pretend to be happy by hiding all my problems. But One day, after I told a teacher what I think in mind, I just felt relieved from my trouble. We are living in the competition-oriented society with no time to take care of our mind. People usually only pay attention to their own happiness, but I’m willing to heal the disease in others’ hearts and to leave hope with them.
That’s all, thank you for listening.

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