急求哪位英语专家改一改这篇文章!Computer and meHi!Everyone!My English name is Omeil and Chinese name is Mai Sibei.I’m ten year old.My favouride color is blue.My dad and mom are teacher.I come from the Min Yuan primary school.I like co

急求哪位英语专家改一改这篇文章!Computer and meHi!Everyone!My English name is Omeil and Chinese name is Mai Sibei.I’m ten year old.My favouride color is blue.My dad and mom are teacher.I come from the Min Yuan primary school.I like co
急求哪位英语专家改一改这篇文章!
Computer and me
Hi!Everyone!My English name is Omeil and Chinese name is Mai Sibei.I’m ten year old.My favouride color is blue.My dad and mom are teacher.I come from the Min Yuan primary school.
I like computers because I like playing computer games.It very funny,and computers can help me to learn well.It can chat with my friend.It can give me a lot of knowledge.The computers are my good friend.
But the computers have two sides.A good aspeats and a bad aspeats.If I play computers everyday,my glasses well be thicker and thicker.And it can “help” me have some work on the weekend.My pocket money will be flies away.So,we should play the good aspeats of computers,through the net to learn more outside the humanities and social knowledge.
I must study my computer very hard ,because computer is very useful and it is very important ,well enough to make some friends from different schools.It can make our colorful life.
That’s all ,thanks for listening.

急求哪位英语专家改一改这篇文章!Computer and meHi!Everyone!My English name is Omeil and Chinese name is Mai Sibei.I’m ten year old.My favouride color is blue.My dad and mom are teacher.I come from the Min Yuan primary school.I like co
Computer and me
Hi!Everyone!My name is Mai Sibei and you can call me my english name Omeil .I’m ten years old.My favourite color is blue.My father and mather are both teachers.I am a student of the Min Yuan primary school.
I like palying computer because of the computer games,they are very funny.And computers can help me to learn well.I can chat with my friends by using computer,and i can get knowledge from the internet.The computer is my good friend.
But the computers have two sides.A good aspect and a bad aspect.If I play computers everyday,my glasses will be thicker and thicker.And it can “help” me to leave some work on the weekend.My pocket money will be flown away.So we should play the good aspects of computers,learn more humanities and social knowledge outside through internet.
I must study computer very hard ,because computer is very useful and it is very important that i can make friends from different schools.It can make our life colorful .
That’s all ,thanks for listening.

1.favorite拼错了
2.第五句应改为Dad and my mom are teachers.
3.help me ti learn well改为 help me to learn better
4.are my good friend 改为 friends
5.play computers去掉s
6.第四段最后一句应为 It can make our life colorful.